Wednesday, July 29, 2009

Have I seen you before ? ...

It was one of those rainy evenings
When I saw her in glittering ear rings.
Her attire was red and so were my feelings.
The sound of rain had a part to play,
Joy was in the mood and I had something to say

War was in my mind and battle in my heart,
What to say her and where to start?
I stopped her on the stairs of the hall,
What I could only do, was stare and then stroll.

After a while, I tried it again.
Happily this time my effort didn’t go in vain;
I asked her “Have I seen you before?”
I know it’s an old trick, but I could no more.
She shaked her head and said a big no.

“Maybe it was someone else whom I had seen”
I said it with a touch of sheen.
Then I thought,
“How could I tell you what I really mean?
You were in my dreams that I had last seen.”

Before I could be showered with some blame,
I went close to her and asked her name.
Blushing slightly under the just found fame
She uttered the eight lettered gem.
….
More than a year has passed since then;
The rainy evenings are here again,
I have nothing to lose and nothing to gain
But all I wish is.... to know her once again.

35 comments:

Mohit said...

Gautam hats off to u ...for
writing with such tenderness and warmth that I had a smile on my face all along while reading this poem...
And your climax as always had your magical touch...
Definitely ur sweetest poem..

Loved the lines
Then I thought,
“How could I tell you what I really mean?
You were in my dreams that I had last seen.”

sunny said...

really it is awesome..i have no words to appreciate your thoughts....

Gautam Anand said...

@ Mohit
thx..
yup this time I thought of deviating from my usual line of poetry.. and wrote sth situational.. and also as u call it "with tenderness" :)

Gautam Anand said...

@ Sunny..
Finally my silent admirer of poems had sth to say .. thx

Anonymous said...

“How could I tell you what I really mean?
You were in my dreams that I had last seen.”

Blushing slightly under the just found fame
She uttered the eight lettered gem.

Liked these lines.. real gem of a poetry..

The ending too .. "But all I wish is.... to know her once again. "
is befitting..

And I agree with mohit.. I was smiling all along too..

NAMELESS FAMELESS said...

beautiful Gautam .. its mesmerizing .. as if you are in some real scene .. as if i was you . and imagining a girl in red. and felt the way you did. wow .. i quote mohit .. "Gautam hats off to u"

VJ Sophie said...

But all I wish is.... to know her once again.

lovely!

Manish said...

All have said so much.. What sud I say more...
But still, u r Gr8 Gautam..
Hats off to u and to ur eight letter gem for being so beautiful throughout...

Gautam Anand said...

@ Nameless.. &
@ Sophie
thank u very much

Gautam Anand said...

@ Manish..
thx for thanking the 8 leterred gem.. hope u dont knw her :)
and a request to all .. plz let ur hats down .. I m not worth tht much ..

A Poetess said...

dear gautum,
i dont like critiquing much...especially poems..but i dont know why this refused to strike a chord within me...the language seemed disjointed and the feeling of the poem peculiarly awkward...
the theme was good, but the execution lacked, maybe due to ur innate shyness or need to withhold information?
but i am not criticising u...coz i really dont have that higher moral stand....just take it as constructive and let it help u be stronger.
cheers man.

Gautam Anand said...

@ Poetess..
I respect ur views..
but I can figure out why u felt tht way..
It might be due to ur expecting the name finally at the end of poem..
As far as language is considered.. I think its my most rythmic poem..
But if you feel so.. I wud reconsider again..

Bidisha...the lonely direction said...

both the poems are good gautam..with sweetness, tenderness and good handling of the language...one thing I must say...all ur poems are very much packed with romanticism and adoration..and can be readily understood that its written by a guy :)

Anonymous said...

Hey Gautam i dont have an poetic mind but ....i know the name of ur girl ...so cheers....
Piyush Kumar....22 Shots

Gautam Anand said...

@ Bidisha
thx ..
@ Piyush
congrats .. ;)

siddharth said...

yet again... par excellence!! :)

Gautam Anand said...

@siddharth..
thx dude.. u hv always been so encouraging and ur suggestion for hindi poetry I wud keep in mind

Arnav said...

Beautiful Gautam :)
I mean the feeling of love simply flows through your poem :)



Keep writing and SMiling
Arnav

Americanising Desi said...

wonderful poem, but i'd like to add that nostalgia has left me for the better of me and for that which has to come. i admit that there are some months i the year when i m totdlaly down and wish i could kill me but really...

i dont wish for anyone i did know then, to know them now :)

but really this was heart aching and touchin!

Gautam Anand said...

@ Arnav
thx .. n keep visiting

Gautam Anand said...

@ AD
thx ..
and yes it's true tht nostalgia doesn't always brings with itself bright feelings

Som said...

WOW !! WOW !! WOW !! PERIOD ....

NAMELESS FAMELESS said...

i came again to read the poem .. its SUPERB

Gautam Anand said...

@ Som
thx! thx! thx! period!

Gautam Anand said...

@ Nameless
U r invited any no. of times.. infact I feel the more u read my poems the more u will like it ..

Deja Vu said...
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Gautam Anand said...

@ Deja Vu..
Sorry but.. I think I m here to write poems and not emotions which I find so many doing .. in the name of peoms..
Anyways you echo the same feelings as ur bloging partner poetess.. n I respect whatever both of u feel..
but forgive me bcoz I will always write sth which is challenging .. istead of writing sth .. only emotional...

The art of poetry I feel is .. writing sth without being maneuovered by emotions..

Closed eyes... said...

Hats off to you, Sir. This is amazngly well-written. Kudos!

This is bitter truth of the blog glimpse of life. I deleted that blog because of some reason and this is my new blog.

trion ninja said...

thanks for the headsup!

I noticed your attempt to experiment with the length of the stanza, trying a 5 line -4 line rythm, but you lost it in between and made two consecutive 5 liners and 4 liners. I dont know if it was conscious, but interesting, since i tried once myself to write in a arihmatic progression of stanza length(the dreams i dream 1).

Leaving the maths aside, it was a nice poem, may be something which every young male can relate to, since i am sure, there has been a time everyone passes through. she gives a brief licence to dream for those escapists who frequently like to escape into their land of thoughts.

Gautam Anand said...

@ closed eyes
thx for appreciating

Gautam Anand said...

@trion
I wasn't actually experimenting..
I was more focussed on contents..
though once I thought to make the structure look good by adding one line .. but it wud have been forceful which I didn't want..
.. anyways thx for ur wonderful words again..

paekut said...

yar lemme congratulate u.....its more about the time that u manage to take out from ur schedule which makes me wonder more......
the poem's nicer than ever...!

Gautam Anand said...

@ Paekut..
Ahh.. finally u woke up ..
thx.. nd as far as time is concerned .. its difficult.. but smtimes .. I can't resist..

Miss OverThinker said...

what a gem.. love it..

Gautam Anand said...

thx... thx again